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The sun rises above the hills and illuminates the frozen fields surrounding us, as we make our way on winding roads.  My nerves. I can’t stop them. My mind is anticipating the future, the very near future. however, I am excited. I know I’m ready and look forward to that future. I try to bring my mind back. breath in, breath out. It becomes repetitive and soon I am in a consistent rhythm.  We arrive and I begin the well-routined practice of transitions. Get the number, rack the bike, attach the shoes and position the running shoes with open mouths. With everything positioned its now time to warm up. I do a short jog seeing the ocean. The sun is calmly breaking the sea mists hold on the land as it has done many times before. As if has no idea of the chaos about to begin. Before long I am there, in a black suit standing ankle deep in the water, ready to race.  The nerves. There still there. Deep breaths, Focus. A horn goes off the nerves are gone, I am focused.


The line. I have crossed it. I am done, finally I am done. My slow methodical thinking from before is now replaced by shallow breaths in a rapid succession along with spontaneous thoughts that leave as fast as they come.  I begin to start to slowly walk but it is more of a hobble, my previously abundant energy has now been littered all over the course leaving nothing for me. I stop and look around. The sun has taken hold and banished the sea fog away for another day, leaving the sun to warm our souls.  It’s over I know it. I did well, went hard so I am happy. I go to the previously meticulous transition area and find my gear strewn over the transition. I don’t care, they have done their job well. I proceed with chucking them in a bag to allow myself to neglect them until we are home. As I go for a warm down jog I reflect on the race and take notes of the important moments as to improve for next time. We load into the car and hit the road, I watch as the sun makes its way behind the hills to rest. letting the night take hold. apparently, I am not the only one tired.

1.8 significant conections

For survival in the harshest conditions, one must rely on internal dialogue or “the voice” to guide them through the toughest of decisions.  internal dialogue guides people through the toughest conditions through the use of motivation for the person and encouragement of the correct decisions even if they are difficult. internal dialogue ability to guide people through these difficult scenarios is what makes it such a necessity for those in difficult scenarios. the texts “touching the void” by Jo Simpson “into thin air” by Jon Krakauer “between a rock and a hard place” by Aron Ralston and “into  the wild” by Jon Krakauer all show the importance of internal dialogue through there experiences with it as well as what happens  when the internal dialogue is ignored.

in “touching the void”  by Joe Simpson internal dialogue keeps Joe focused on survival in the extreme circumstances because of internal dialogue in his head guiding him.  this is shown throughout the text but one of its first appearances is when Joe is being lowered by Simon at a fast pace until eventually Joe slides of a cliff Simon is unaware of this and continues to lower Joe. when it is time for Joe to underweight the rope he cannot because he is hanging on the rope. because Simon does not know he is hanging so he continues to wait holding Joe’s weight. however, when conditions worsen and he starts sliding downwards his internal dialogue suggests to him to use the knife to cut the rope. this thought’s shown with this quote”The knife! The thought came out of nowhere. Of course, the knife. Be quick, come on, get it.”. the imperative sentences like the knife, be quick, get it.  they are all commands or simple instructions that are easy to follow. this is important because in extreme scenarios the human mind can not function as it would in other cases it is mostly focused on surviving what is happening. it is easier to survive when things are simpler this is why it is short and simple sentences as it allows the brain to focus on achieving the goal instead of struggling to understand what is happening.  this is reinforced later in the text when Joe is attempting to climb out of the cassavas with his injured leg he is repeating to himself as he climbs “That’s the way. Find a routine and stick to it.” this is short sentences that are clear and serve to encourage himself and then more instructions about what to do next. these short sentences encourage Joe to keep working and focus on what is happening now and where he needs to head. this makes it similar for Joe to focus on the task at hand and ignore the distractions IE his leg hurting. this helps the reader to clearly see what is happening what Joe is focusing on what he needs to be focusing on and most importantly what he is thinking.

“into thin air” by Jon Krakauer is another text that shows the very real need for internal dialogue. while Jon Krakauer is attempting to climb Everest   with his guide rob hall and the other paying customers he talks about mountaineering issues and topics on the way up one of the things he talks about is how important it is to listen to distress calls and to listen to them. this is shown when he says ” the sort of individual who is programmed to ignore personal distress and keep pushing for the top is frequently programmed to disregard signs of grave and imminent danger as well.”. this quote talks about those people that ignore and push past there limits often do not know when is too much this puts in grave danger of going too far and injuring them self on the mountain. however, if they were to listen to there personal distress calls they would be in a better mindset and more prepared to face difficult scenarios. because of there personal distress calls being listened to people are normally closer to there comfort zone meaning that they will be better suited to making life and death decisions. another point where internal dialogue is shown is when Jon and his group are making there way up the Khumbu icefall a treacherous and unpredictable piece on the way up to Everest. while he is going through here he makes the comment “my inner voice resembles Chicken Little: it was screaming that I was about to die” here the inner voice is surviving for Joe as something that allows him to know that he is at risk of injury. because he knows now that he is at risk he will be more precarious on the way up also when he says that his inner voice resembles chicken little he is showing that his inner voice is very afraid and often resembling chicken little. this is mostly a good thing during climbing as it shows the reader that he is unlikely to take risks and is likely to be taking the safest route if he listens to his inner voice. the reader can learn from this that it is often those who take risks often and make habits of it are often those that go too far and may not be able to come back, however, those that listen to there inner voice are unlikely to make rash unguided decisions and are likely to take the route that will get them down alive. this shows the reader that the people that listen to there inner voice will be more likely to survive when compared with those that do not. 

like the book touching the void, into thin air clearly displays to the reader that those that listen to there inner voice / internal dialogue are significantly more likely to take a better route to stay motivated and “keep their eyes on the prize” as such the prize ultimately being survival when things go sourer.  for joe, it was making it back to camp before Simon left and for and for Jon it was making through the mountain safety however for those in their everyday lives it could be that they need to get through a difficult day.

in “between a rock and a hard place” by Aron Ralston internal dialogue is used to keep Aron the main character focused on survival. Aaron Ralston is an adventurer in the USA how is commonly climbed many mountains and survived the harshest of terrain. however, when he decided to go through a canyon he was jumping on choke stones making his way through when one of the stones rolled under his weight and pinned his arm between the walls and the choke stone . in order for him to survive he listened to his internal dialogue which guided him through the experience. one example of this is once he is first trapped by the choke stone he notes this “My mind commands my body, “Get your hand out of there!” “this here is an example were internal dialogue is completely controlling his every move in order to test the waters and evaluate what is happing. this shows under extreme stress that Aron is feeling with his arm being trapped the mind takes control of the body to stop any irrational actions to occur. this is because of the mind’s reasoning in these scenarios is far better then irrational actions that may cause the situation to worsen if the body panics and takes all control.  another area of the text that supports the use of the internal dialogue is when Aron is stuck in the canyon he talks to the camera about his struggles and his thoughts these thoughts are really Aron trying to wrap his head around what is happening and by vocalizing his thoughts he is able to become more confident with his decisions and talk about things so he can control his emotions. he starts by saying “its two pm on a Wednesday afternoon. it’s getting close to four days that I have been in this hole.” he then finishes off by addressing his loved ones by saying “I’m holding on but its really slowing down…thank you love you”. by him being able to talk about what is happing what the time and date and etc is he is able to reflect and look back and what has happened by him being able to do this he can think to the future it is most likely the mental voice in his head encouraging him to do this as it knows that he can not concentrate the same thing applies to his message for the loved ones he is talking about  what is on his mind by doing this he is sharing it with what could be other people if they find the camera so he sees it as a way to talk to his family. also when he is talking about it getting really slow but that he is still holding on he is motivating himself to in the future so he can think this is where I have been and this is where I need to go. these thoughts being said to the camera are encouraged by the voice to stop Aron from living in the past so instead, he can focus on the now. this can teach the reader that sharing emotions is often driven by a voice in the head to allow the person to be able to focus on the now even in extreme situations.

between a rock and a hard place relates to touching the void as most if not all of  Joe’s and Aron’s thoughts are to get him in the correct mindset to be able to be able to focus on what he needs to be doing even when his body or his mind starts to break. these thoughts of survival are derived from the voice encouraging Joe and Aron to think like this. which keeps them in the correct mindset to tackle their challenges.

in “into the wild” by Jon Krakauer, internal dialogue is uncommon often making it more difficult and then impossible for him to survive. this is shown at a few key points throughout the text. into thin air by Jon Krakauer talks about a young man called Chris McCandless how goes of on his own after finishing university and travels around the united states of America and never contacts his family he travelled around the USA with many near-death experiences before deciding that he wanted to try to survive on his own in Alaska so he travelled up and attempted to survive for a spring to autumn time frame.he later died through his experiences as he was not able to cross back over one of the rivers so had to wait it out. as his sister noted to Jon when being interviewed. “now, of course, they second-guess the decision, even though buck was really badly parent’s can’t help wondering how things may have tuned out differently if Chris had taken Buck with him. Chris didn’t think twice before putting himself in danger but he never would have put Buck in any danger.” this shows to the reader that Chris’s sister thinks things could have turned out differently if Chris had taken Buck.  so if Chris had taken buck then perhaps he may have not taken anywhere near the risks that he did end up taking in order to protect the dog buck. if Chris had taken the dog he would have used the internal dialogue effectively meaning he would be able to make sure that he didn’t succumb to an unfortunate disaster leaving Buck on his own. however he did not end up taking the dog and because of this, he chose mostly to ignore his internal dialogue in most situations. as a result of this, he ended up in a hopeless situation and died. from this, a reader can conclude that those who use there internal dialogue will have a significantly greater chance of survival because of this they are in a much better place for survival.

in comparison with touching the void by Jo Simpson  into the wild shows none of the important internal dialogue moments that help with survival in extreme situations because of a lack of internal dialogue Chris ends up dying while Joe and Simon both survive using internal dialogue to help their motivation and because of this they are able to survive through the calming and reasoning of internal dialogue. this shows the reader that it is essential to have internal dialogue in extreme situations and also highlights how important it is to listen to it and those that don’t listen to it run the risk of death through there decisions being unregulated without the voice. 

a person survival is dependent on the quality of decisions that they make and the attitude they approach these decisions and carry the way they carry out there answers. this is shown to the reader through the books “into thin air” by  Joe Simpson, “touching the void” by Jon Krakauer, “between a rock and a hard place” by Aron Ralston ” and “into the wild” by Jon Krakauer all display to the reader how internal dialogue is an absolute necessity for survival when people are in extreme situations. through the different representation of the voice and what happens when the voice is ignored we learn as readers what the voice is what it is trying to achieve and how we can best use it and how it can affect the characters in the extreme scenarios .  as humans we are faced with many decisions some more important than others with the crucial decisions we must make it is important to listen to internal dialogue when making decisions.

1.1 written text essay: “touching the void”


touching the void by Joe Simpson is a book that talks about the struggles and near death experiences that Joe had on a mountain he attempted to climb called Suila grand and what he learnt from the key moments.  language techniques were used throughout the text to allow the reader to understand the key ideas in the text. three of these language techniques are symbolism, emotive language and foreshadowing.

“I couldn’t bring myself to dispense the comforting reassurance of the rope” is a quote from joe when they are on the mountain. it shows the reader that Joe sees the rope as something that is comforting and reassuring. this is because when he is connected to the rope he will also still be connected to the person on the other side of the rope meaning that there is someone to help and joe is not alone when connected to the rope which is reassuring for joe. because he feels the rope is important as a connection it explains his response later in the text when the rope is cut by Simon he then says this “cut I couldn’t take my eyes of it” he then goes on to say his “he had gone… I was dead”. this shows the reader that as soon as the rope is cut he cannot believe it and what he can not believe is that while he is still connected to the rope he is only connected to the remains and it is no longer a connection to Simon as it was before. this really scares joe as he saw the rope as something of safety before it was cut however now he has lost that safety and is now stunned to lose the connection. from the third next quote, we can see that Joe believes that without Simon he can survive this is another broken connection just like the rope. this shows the reader that when the tools we rely on fail or disappear on us we are likely to panic and assume the worse however if we were to calm ourselves as Joe eventually did we would always see a new way. this tells us that as humans we assume the worst and often don’t have all of the information that we need for our judgements this is why it is important to slow down and have all of the information before making judgements.

“he was still grinning and his confidence was contagious” is a quote from joe describing Simon when they were lowering joe down a steep slope. in this quote emotive language is used to give the reader a sense of the emotions and vibes in the group. in this case, words like ginning and confidence portray to the reader that Simon is feeling good about the current situation and because the word contagious is used we know that these same good feelings are also being spread around the group. due to these word choices, we can see that Simon and Joe are beginning to believe that they may actually make it down alive and their thoughts are reflecting this for us. however, we can see a distinct change in the mode of the text when Joe says”my optimism had evaporated”. this shows a significant shift in the mood of the text as the word evaporated has a negative connotation to it and because the word optimism is before it and generally has a good connotation to it we can see that the good feelings that Simon and Joe were sharing before are no longer there. as a reader, we can see the very quick changes of emotions and words together that portray the feeling of that section of text however it also happens in our everyday lives with the word choices of the people around you showing how they actually feel.

the foreshadowing was used throughout touching the void to give readers a clue as to what will happen will happen later in the text. one example of this is when Simon is lowering Joe and Joe thinks “the face here was much steeper enough to frighten me and make me think that Simon was barely in control”. this is foreshadowing because Simon is in fact barely in control due to his hands dealing with frostbite in the extreme conditions. due to Simon barely being in control due to his frostbitten hands he lowered joe extremely quickly. this rushing caused joe not to have enough time to stop due to the speed when he realised that the steep was turning to be a cliff. because this quote encourages the reader to think about what may end up happening it also allows us to place ourselves in their shoes and chose the decisions we would make if it was us. this teaches us as readers that if something appears wrong or unusual as joe noticed with the steep slope than it may be that we are correct in which case it is important that we act sooner rather then later as we may not get a second chance. this can often be difficult as it means being beyond ordinary and this is often very hard but it is important to do so as we may not get a second chance.

because of the language techniques used by Joe Simpson in “touching the void” to portray to the reader the key ideas in the text. from symbolism, we can learn how if we chose to become reliant on it becomes essential for us that we believe we can live without and it is important not to come to these conclusions because you can survive if you were to lose it this is why it is important to not rely solely on an object such as the rope.  the emotive language was used to show how it is important to listen to the words that the people around you are using as it will show what they are thinking which is important as if it is ignored then choices may be made that damage the group, and through  foreshadowing was learn that it is important to trust and act upon our emotions as often they can guide us when we are uncertain and they encourage us to take action when it may be difficult. from these language techniques, we can begin to understand the key messages of the text and also what they teach us about human nature

alan turing


imagine coming to work and attempting to solve a code that has 15 Quintilian possible combinations that’s a 15 with eighteen zeros behind it and that same code changes every 24 hours so the work that you have done on that day effectively becomes useless. imagine having the opportunity to save thousands of life’s and having to say no.  imagine coming to work and having to hide who you really are .well mathematician and code breaker Alan Turing had to face all of these.  :46


enigma is a Nazi machine used to encode there communications with multiple setting’s that can be used.  this is one of the machines that Alan Turing was  asked to solve as it was classified as something essential to be solved.  the Nazis used there code for anything from weather reports to direct orders from  Hitler himself as the Nazis considered the code unsolvable. Turing’s brilliance was first displayed in 1940 when  he adapted  a polish machine to create a anti-enigma machine called a bombe and in 1943 they were cracking 84,000 enigma messages per month. turning was personally responsible for solving a more complex form of enigma being used by the u-boats that at the time were blocking and sinking the merchant convoys. as Winston Churchill later quoted “the only thing that ever really frightened me during the war was the U-boat peril” which shows just how crucial solving the code was.

okay so if we imagine  then we just solved enigma and got a message stating this “the locations of the German subs  is 57 23 ” and you knew that  your countries boats were traveling through that area what would you do.  celebrate solving the code. send a message to them,  tell the head of your area? while all of these seem logical Alan Turing saw the best solution. that being, do nothing. let that crew die. I know what your thinking why would they do that. simple if the British dogged every obstacle then it would be clear that the Nazis unbreakable code had been broken and the Germans would just change protocol and it would all become useless.  and your opportunity to save millions has just been wasted. but of course they did save millions but they had to be smart about it . so Alan Turing came up with a equation that  would calculate the maximum amount of lives that could be saved without letting the Germans suspect well as this he had to convince his peers and leaders that it had to be secret. this approach has been credited with saving 14 million lives and reducing the length of the war by 2 years.Alan knowingly  wrote of thousands with out without a moments hesitation when he fully under stood the repercussions  of this discovery. his fast thoughts under his own mental pressure that he placed upon himself resulted in the long term with millions of lives saved. but as well as keeping it quite immediately it was also something that Alan had to take to the grave as it was of such huge significance. he could share it with no one bar the few that already knew which must of made it very difficult to deal with. but Alan’s persevered  well out side of his comfort zone . and ultimately led to the end of the war  which we can all be happy about. so if you think about it “sacrifice a few to save millions.”

as well as cracking secret codes he had his own secret. Alan turning was gay. in the time that Alan truing lived in Britain homosexuality was illegal and considered a threat to national security.  so through all of his struggles he had to keep the secret.  but in 1952 he was convicted with gross indices with another man.  in court he was found guilty and given the  choice between prison or hormonal treatment. he chose hormonal treatment and endured a full year of horrible treatment. hormone treatment or chemical castration is used to reduce or eliminate ones sexual drive because at the time being gay was treated as a mental illness. the British at the time believed that they could  cure gay men with chemical castration, which of course they couldn’t. and of course there were side effects. in Alan Turing case he experienced side effects of a bloated physique and breast enlargement. 2 years later after going through the medication he was found dead and a post-Mortem examination determined that the cause of his death was cyanide poisoning. his body was found next to a half eaten apple so it is speculated to be the way he committed suicide. so while he did all of his incredible work on the war he had to keep his homosexuality a secret which must have stressed him and forced him out of his comfort zone quite a lot.  but after his war efforts he was kept under extremely high security due to the secrets he and his colleges held. due to this higher surveillance he was under significantly more pressure then before to keep his homosexuality a secret. this is surely must have been something playing on his mind before he committed suicide.


Alan Turing’s systematic approaches significantly effected the path of humanity with solving the Nazi code allowing the allied forces to know exactly what will be happening but then his mental strength to deal with keeping his achievement secret and resulting with thousands of deaths that he consciously wrote off to save 14 million lives and shorten the war by 2 years. all while hiding that he was gay. this determination and utter genius ultimately changed the world forever. and for his whole short life he was considered a nobody and driven mad by his own government he committed suicide.  “sometimes it is the people that no one imagines anything of, who do the things that no one can imagine”. this is a quote from Alan Turing referring to himself and how despite the world thought that he couldn’t change  the world,  his unique way of thinking  changed the world in ways no one could imagine. the mental challenges that he faced like dealing with allowing people to die as well as keeping his homosexuality a secret must have certainly been a constant struggle for him during some of the tougher times in his life. this genius revolutionized the world in ways they couldn’t imagine. and if we had learnt to accept his differences who  knows were the world would be now. this story teaches us to accept all people no matter there differences because as far as you know that persons about to change the world in ways you can not Imagine.


chapter 9

in chapter 9 light is used to symbolise hope for joe’s survival. after the rope is cut and joe falls in the crevasse he begins to lose his drive to survive and starts  accept that he is dead and that there is no chance of joe surviving. as the night drags on he becomes more and more certain that he will not survive.  but as the light of day comes out his thoughts become clearer and he decides that anywhere  is better then were he is now. so he makes a few weak attempt at making it up the side before descending down the crevasse.  he soon finds a floor of snow below he then sees rays of light and then the text states ” a pillar of gold light beamed diagonally from a small hole in the roof spraying bright refractions of the far wall of the crevasse. ‘    he then goes on to say ” i was going to reach that sun beam. i knew with absolute certainty. how i would do it, and when i would reach it knew not considered. i just knew’  these quotes show that for joe light represents hope for joe which drives him to concentrate solely on survival which is in contrast to the night when he was hardly thinking of any constructive thoughts .” a pillar of gold light beamed beamed diagonally from a small hole” is metaphor  because there was not literally a gold pillar in the crevasse but it was used because a gold pillar is considered valuable and strong . which is the source of the strength that joe has to get out which compares to a strong pillar.  the small hole were the light comes from describes it to be a small thing that that is hard to get to but something that joe desires to get to. this relates to the gold rush were men rushed to find small but desirable gold no matter the difficulty  just like joes desire to get to the small hole.

i was mesmerized by the beam of sunlight burning

chapter 8 – silent witness

mood and tone is used in chapter 8 to give the reader a better understanding of what is going on.  simon retreats from the mountain the mood and tone changes to reflect what simon is thinking about on his way down words like. words like stupid , silly, terrifying and cruel describe the negative atmosphere that simon is experiencing after supposedly losing his climbing partner. the tone was created through the word choice of joe to give the reader lonely and used to show how simon didn’t quite understand what to think about what happened. from these word choices we judge what what simon is doing and how is acting with a better understanding of where he is coming from and why he chose to make those choices because we understand the circumstances that drives him to make those choices.

shadows in the ice

contrast is used in chapter 7 to show the reader what joe is feeling and what he is experiencing. after joe falls in the crevasse he accepts he is going to die  but then wildly shouts out that he is alive showing the large amounts of confusion joe is dealing with in this life threatening scenario because he is accepting that he mostly likely going to die. so he begins to act irrationally.  this is  shown in the text when joe says “i accepted that i was going to die. there was no alternative.”  but then goes on to say wildly ” alive!…  I laughed through the burning, and kept laughing hard, feeling tears rolling down my face” these two examples contrast because one comes from a negative angle while the other is more positive and focuses on that he is alive as well as being negative and positive they are also joe thinking very logically and looking at just the facts in the first quote were is on the other quote he is thinking irrationally and not focussing on the important details. these show the immense confusion that joe would be experiencing. the reader can tell from the contrasting used above that joe is struggling to control his thoughts and mostly given up   on survival and is just waiting to leave. this behavior is something that he probably would not have exhibited at the start of the book and probably was caused by the tough nature of the mountains. which makes us question weather we as readers would have been strong and willing enough in that environment to be able to constantly think logically and positively when joe couldn’t ?


what is included

this piece of text has many references to other things that help display the narrator’s  thoughts and emotions to the area around him.  one of the images used to display the narrator’s fear of going down to lima is “the icy white sweep of Sarapo”  the words icy white sweep makes the sarapo sound  sound difficult and scary reflecting the characters fear of going down the slope.  “the chaotic bustle of lema” is used to show the contrast from lima and were the narrator is on the mountain both physically by the different locations  and also mentally with the constant silence and self reflection the narrator is getting on the mountain and the constant distractions of being in a city.

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